Help finding rune text errors

Darkmarsh Blackstaff should be

" Now they gaze in awe...."

remove 're from they

Maybe add some commas to keep the same pacing through the last sentence. Or it's like him yelling to the heavens which in that case, no commas.

 

'Corgi Mount' should be capitalized in Corgi Ranger/ Tog and Kaiya's flavor text.

 

Awesome thread man.

I have to ask though, what about runes that don't really have errors, but don't strictly work as intended(you know, like RD)?

 

Good to know, here goes another:

 

Corgi Mount is the proper noun.

 

would 6 turns not work fundamentally the same? it would simply allow them to have AP on spawn which personally i think that's okay.

 

even though there is no comma, this is how it would be read now.
"...,but it takes a certain agility to master the art with a Corgi, mounted whose cadence when running provides a certain challenge."

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"...master the art with a Corgi mounted..." & also "...with a Corgi mounted whose cadence when running...? Why the bestiality? @Sokolov you prefer action over what's proper?

This is the proper form of the noun 'Corgi Mount'
"...,but it takes a certain agility to master the art with a Corgi Mount whose cadence when running provides a certain challenge."

"...,but it takes a certain agility to master the art with a Corgi Mount, whose cadence when running provides a certain challenge."

Or just remove the word mounted...ya animal lover @Sokolov

"...,but it takes a certain agility to master the art with a Corgi, whose cadence when running provides a certain challenge."

"The Corgi Ranger(proper noun) called for his Corgi Mount(proper noun)" or "The Corgi Ranger called for his Corgi(proper noun)."​